The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009.
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the
reason
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of
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travel
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and
main
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the main
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issues
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for the travelling public in the US in 2009.Five
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reason
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and six
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are represented, the reasons are visit, social, shopping, personal and for work,
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are
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the price
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of
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, safety concerns, aggressive drivers, highway congestion, access to public transport and space for
pedestrains
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pedestrians
.
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we
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about the
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of
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travel
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. Obviously, the majority of
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reason
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is for work, almost take up half
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of all, at 49%.
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visit somebody and social are the lowest of the chart, the social
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take up 10% and visit somebody only at 6%. The
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shopping and personal are quite close,
they
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are 16% and 19%. The six
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for the travelling public have
the
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totally different distribution. Price of
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play
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a major role in all, almost 3/1, at 36%. Meanwhile, safety concerns, aggressive drivers and highway congestion
almost
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are almost
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equal,
at14
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at 14
%,17% and 19%.
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, the lowest
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are access to public transport and space for
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pedestrians
, only at 8% and 6%. In summary, there are
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amount of reasons and
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,maybe lots of
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of
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price
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the price
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of
travel
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were happened
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in
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the way to and from work.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reason, travel, issues with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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