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The table below gives infromation on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives infromation on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the rates of customer earnings in various categories in Ireland, Italy,
Spain
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, and Sweden and the
last
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 one is
Turkey
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 in 2002. It is obvious that
,
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 the group of
leisure
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/education had the lowest rate.
According to
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 the table, as can be seen,
Turkey
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 had dedicated their earns to food and
leisure
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while
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 Italy spent the most on clothes.
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,
Spain
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 became a nation which had less interest in
leisure
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/education.
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, in the first division (food, drinks, tobacco),
Turkey
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 stood in first place as the nation which spent costs 32. 14%.
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, Italy,
Spain
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 and Sweden stayed in the middle of the range (16. 36, 18. 80, 15. 77 respectively).
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, Italy stood in
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first place in clothing/footwear
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 Sweden had the lowest rate in that category.
It is clear that
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, in the third and
last
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 section,
Spain
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 stood in the
last
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 place.
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,
In
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the
last
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 section means
leisure
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/education in all five countries except
Turkey
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 which had high interest in that category the remaining lands had the same rate.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words spain, turkey, leisure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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