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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003 to 2012.
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The line graph provides data about the changes in three areas of crime in New Port city centre between 2003 to 2010.
Overall
, in all
years
robbery
 had the lowest
number
 of
incidents
. As can be seen,
initially
robbery
 had the lowest figure of
incidents
 with
the
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rate
 of roughly 600,
whereas
,
burglary
 had the highest
number
 of
incidents
 at approximately 3400. From 2003 to 2004 the
rate
 of
burglary
 rose reaching
at
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its peak accounting for 3750. From 2004 to 2008 the
rate
 of
burglary
 declined and in 2008 the
rate
 was 1250. Over the
years
 the
rate
 of
burglary
 increased and in 2012 the
rate
 was a little less than 1500. Originally the
rate
 of
car
theft
 was roughly 2750. From 2003 to 2006 the
rate
 of
car
theft
 dropped by approximately 750 from 2750 to 2000. Over the
years
car
theft
 had some minor changes and in 2012 the
rate
 of
car
theft
 was roughly 2750 which was in 2003. In 2003 the
rate
 of
robbery
 was roughly 600. In 2015 the
rate
 of
robbery
 reached
at
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its peak at 900. Over the
years
 the
rate
 of
robbery
 saw some changes,
however
 in 2012
robbery
 had the lowest
number
 of
incidents
 at 750. In 2012
robbery
 had the lowest
number
 of
incidents
 at 750, meanwhile,
car
theft
 had the highest
number
 of
incidents
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, robbery, number, incidents, rate, burglary, car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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