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online education is better than physical learning. do you agree?

#education
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 for
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 of
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 which is very useful for
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 life. It can increase the power of
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 and get them ready to
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 the chance of getting highly paid jobs, a number of people believe that
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 in our daily life.so we have alternative ways that we can access
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education
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however
 there is a lot of
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 that can be supporting online learning is better than the
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positive
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 students from far areas, without access to home. One of the main benefits of online learning is the flexibility they provide, allowing students to set their own schedules as
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 want. It is
also
 giving freedom for them in how what, when and where
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 learn.
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 everywhere in the world. and to suit a busy schedule.
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 need to support of family during
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 system.so flexibility can help them
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develop intellectual ability Among the many benefits of
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online learning, you’ll find virtual classrooms are great for people who are advancing their
education
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(Elaine Allen and Jeff Seaman2007) it means if you have full-time work during the day,
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you can still take online classes in the evening. It doesn’t change in your study.
Therefore
, you don’t need to get a concern. you’ll need to make some sacrifices, sure, but you won’t have to do so when it comes to work, your studies or your family – and that’s what matters. The second reason is providing a wider range of programs and course offerings which can help them to study different
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 of materials at the same time.
Such
 as my older sister can get 3
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 at the
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 in different
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 one of Indian
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 and the other American
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 at the same
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therefore
 it
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a great facilities
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 for pupils who want to get
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 of
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 at the currently. Many universities and colleges now offer a wide range of online degree programmes, including bachelor’s and master’s degrees, in a variety of fields. At IU, we offer a wide range of cutting-edge tech and business Bachelor's and Master’s programmes, including specialised MBA degrees(.
This
 lets you choose a programme that matches your career ambitions.( Jason Silverman, PhD) So many
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 would like to study different
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 because they want to work with
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 of career. It is essential for
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 of society to engage with different
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 of degree
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
  • contentment
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