Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion
In the contemporary era, there has been cutting-edge technology.
Thus
, that is
easier access to online shopping in enormous ways. The topic has twins separate between people
who agreed and people
who disagreed. I will give my opinion in the essay below.
The view people
who saw adventages
about access to the shopping easier in nowadays. In my opinion, I think why Correct your spelling
advantages
people
saying about
that. Change preposition
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Firstly
, at
the modern era has a wide range of Change preposition
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devised
including iPad mobile phones and Replace the word
devices
also
computers and so on. Thus
, people
who want to pay attention have made it easier if
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to
shopping
on mobile phones. Wrong verb form
shop
In addition
, shopping online it
is mostly convenient for Correct pronoun usage
apply
buy
something if they haven't free time or busy time that made can't go outside Wrong verb form
buying
the
shopping online it is their choice. Meanwhile, Correct article usage
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the
shopping online Correct article usage
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there have
many Wrong verb form
has
of
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promotion
sales that Replace the word
promotional
the
best Add a missing verb
are the
ways
Fix the agreement mistake
way
if
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for
who
want to buy something cheaper.
Correct pronoun usage
those who
However
, in the part of disagree, I think some people
who were status poor it's might be hurt when they want to buy, but they can't buy about those. another og
opinion, I think Correct word choice
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that is
also
negative ways on
online. Change preposition
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Such
as it's might be cheating has
occurred on the application online that Wrong verb form
might have
a
might be Correct article usage
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reason
some Add an article
the reason
a reason
people
disagree about to paying attention something in online
Add an article
the online
application
. Perhaps, some Fix the agreement mistake
applications
people
think if go outside it can more find
interesting in the shop more than online.
In conclusion, Verb problem
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it
agree and disagree Correct pronoun usage
I
this
depending on Change preposition
with this
people
who was
prefer Unnecessary verb
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themslves
.Correct your spelling
themselves
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Coherence & Cohesion
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