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ou should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay better by having a clear introduction, main body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This structure helps in organizing your thoughts and arguments effectively.
coherence cohesion
Improve your logical structure by linking ideas and paragraphs more clearly. Use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'However', 'For instance', and 'Moreover' appropriately to connect sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction that introduces the topic and your viewpoint, as well as a conclusion that summarizes your argument and restates your opinion.
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Address the task more completely by covering all parts of the prompt. Discuss the justification for animal experimentation, consider the ethical implications, and explore possible alternatives to this practice.
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Clarify and elaborate on your ideas by providing more detailed explanations, reasoning, and specific examples. This will make your argument more compelling and comprehensive.
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Use specific examples to support your points. Personal experiences, historical examples, or hypothetical situations can make your arguments more persuasive and illustrate your points more effectively.
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