The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.
The table shows
about
indicators of social and economic sectors among four countries in 1994 Change preposition
apply
to
United Nations Statistics. Change preposition
according to
Overall
, it can be seen that four countries have variative number
in the all of categories.
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numbers
To begin
, Japan
has highest
Change the article
the highest
number
of annual income per person, namely 15760. Following
this
, Canada
has similar
amount Correct article usage
a similar
income
yearly as Change preposition
of income
Japan
does. Whereas
Peru
and Zaire
obtained 160 and 130 dollars. Then
, Japan
becomes a countey
Correct your spelling
country
county
which
its citizen has Correct word choice
where
longest
expectancy. Change the article
the longest
Then
as earlier Canada
also
come
up with Wrong verb form
came
similar
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a similar
the similar
number of
life expectancy at birth namely 76. People Correct quantifier usage
apply
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
lived
in Wrong verb form
live
Peru
have less range of life expectancy compared with Japan
and Canada
. However
, Individuals that
Correct pronoun usage
who
lived
in Wrong verb form
live
Zaire
have shortest
life among those countries.
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the shortest
Next,
in terms of day to day
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day-to-day
calorie
that Fix the agreement mistake
calories
accepted
per individual, the Add a missing verb
are accepted
number
reaching
the thousands mark. In Wrong verb form
reaches
this
turn, Canada
and Japan
become Add an article
the leader
leader
which has Fix the agreement mistake
leaders
biggest
calorie supply at 3326 and 2846. Correct article usage
the biggest
While
Peru
and Zaire
achieved calorie supply with almost similar number
. Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
Last
, regarding to literacy rate of adult
, Fix the agreement mistake
adults
Canada
and Japan
reached almost perfect number
namely 99%, Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
whereas
Peru
and Change preposition
in Peru
Zaire
individuals on average have percentage
of literacy ability in 68% and 34%Add an article
a percentage
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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