The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.
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The table shows
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indicators of social and economic sectors among four countries in 1994
to
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United Nations Statistics.
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, it can be seen that four countries have variative
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number
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numbers
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in the all of categories.
To begin
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Japan
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has
highest
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number
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of annual income per person, namely 15760.
Following
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this
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,
Canada
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has
similar
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a similar
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amount
income
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of income
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yearly as
Japan
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does.
Whereas
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Peru
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and
Zaire
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obtained 160 and 130 dollars.
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Japan
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becomes a
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country
county
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its citizen has
longest
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the longest
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expectancy.
Then
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as earlier
Canada
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also
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up with
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a similar
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number of
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life expectancy at birth namely 76. People
that
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lived
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in
Peru
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have less range of life expectancy compared with
Japan
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and
Canada
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.
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, Individuals
that
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lived
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in
Zaire
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have
shortest
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the shortest
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life among those countries.
Next,
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in terms of
day to day
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calorie
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calories
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that
accepted
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are accepted
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per individual, the
number
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reaching
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the thousands mark. In
this
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turn,
Canada
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and
Japan
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become
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the leader
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leader
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leaders
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which has
biggest
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the biggest
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calorie supply at 3326 and 2846.
While
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Peru
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and
Zaire
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achieved calorie supply with almost similar
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number
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numbers
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.
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, regarding to literacy rate of
adult
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adults
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,
Canada
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and
Japan
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reached almost perfect
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number
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numbers
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namely 99%,
whereas
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Peru
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in Peru
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and
Zaire
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individuals on average have
percentage
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a percentage
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of literacy ability in 68% and 34%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, japan, canada, peru, zaire with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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