In some countries, more and more adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
Nowadays in some
countries
almost all Add a comma
countries,
adults
continue to live with their moms and dads after graduation and even found
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find
job
. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
This
essay will discuss negative
sides of Correct article usage
the negative
this
such
as some restrictions and the positive aspects of this
statement. While
living with parents
has several advantages, I believe all adults
have to be independent.
On the one hand, living in same
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the same
house
with parents
can cause
some advantages. The main reason Verb problem
have
of
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for
this
depends on financial and emotional supports
. If children and Fix the agreement mistake
support
parents
live in one house
, they can support each others
. Change to a singular noun
other
For
example
they might pay some payments or bills together. Add a comma
example,
As a result
of this
they save Add a comma
this,
a mount
of money. Correct your spelling
amount
Moreover
, adults
should take care their
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of their
parents
. According to
the customs of some countries children, especially, the youngest sons need to live with their family members. And it can increase a sense of loving
and affection.
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love
On the other hand
, living in shared
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a shared
house
with parents
might not be beneficial in some cases. It is not easy to live with whole
family in one Correct article usage
a whole
house
. Because of this
, teenegers
and Correct your spelling
teenagers
adults
face to range
of problems. Young people Add an article
a range
more
life experience. They have to Add a missing verb
have more
parepare
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prepare
some
challenges of life and they should be independent. Living with Change preposition
for some
parents
can restrict these opportunities. It might be difficult to create and improve own lifestyle to live with other family members.
In conclusion, there are several helpful and harmful effects of this
trend. While
it has Correct article usage
the proses
proses
of living with Fix the agreement mistake
process
parents
, it seems to me that disadvantages
of Correct article usage
the disadvantages
this
tradition overweight than the advantages.Submitted by omondavlat91 on
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