The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar graph illustrates data on how average
families
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in one particular country spent their weekly
income
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in 1968 and 2018 respectively.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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in 1968
families
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spent more on food
while
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later the highest proportion of their
earning
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earnings
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was spent on leisure activities.
In contrast
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, fuel and power
expenditure
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expenditures
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were the lowest in both years. In 1968, food was a popular option among
families
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, constituting approximately 35% of their weekly
income
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.
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, 10% of their
income
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was spent on housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
while
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household and personal goods accounted for about 8% of
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families
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spending, and transportation received around 9% of weekly
income
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.
Furthermore
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, fuel and power received the lowest spending. By 2018, leisure had become the top spending category, constituting approximately 23% of weekly
income
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while
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housing received slightly less at about 19% of
income
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weekly.
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, food and transport received the lowest percentage of spending, at about 17% and 14% respectively. It was evident that spending on fuel and power was lower in both years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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