The charts show information concerning speed-camera use, together with statistics on road accidents, for the city of Melbourne. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The charts show information concerning speed-camera use, together with statistics on road accidents, for the city of Melbourne.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words
The bar chart represents the data on the
amount
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number
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of
speed-cameras
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speed cameras
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in Melbourne between 2002 and 2005,
whether
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and
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the line graph compares the statistics of deaths and
accidents
in the same period.
Overall
, most of the speed-cameras were
edtablished
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established
in 2005,
while
the least number was in 2002.
Additionally
, the peak of mortality rates
occured
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occurred
between 2004 and 2005, reaching the biggest proportion of
accidents
in 2005.
To begin
, looking at the bar graph, 25 cameras were placed in the city in 2002, followed by around 35 in 2003. It becomes obvious that
due to
many
accidents
happened in 2004, more cameras were provided in that year, at approximately 60, achieving the greatest number of 150 in 2005.
According to
the line graph, slightly above 3% of
accidents
were recorded at the start of the period, fluctuating to about 3,5% and back till 2004, gradually moving up to slightly under 4%. Even though mortality rates were considerably low from 2002(below 1%) to 2004, at 1%, the proportion of deaths had jumped to just under 2% after 2004 and
then
went back to lightly above 1%.
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