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Some experts believe that school it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primaryrather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #school #children #language #primaryrather #outweigh
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A number of specialists
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 that
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ideal
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 time to start learning
on
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a non-native
language
 is at the elementary
school
level
 rather than
middle
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the middle
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school
level
. In my conviction , learning foreign
toungue
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tongue
 later makes the students
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 with all other academic
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 in
secoundary
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secondary
 educational institutional status.
However
,
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exposure
 to
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 external
language
 at
early
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school
age's
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let
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to
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be fluent in a
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language
 and more
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to learn.
Thus
, I think the
benifits
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benefits
 of learning a
secound
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second
toungue
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tongue
 early
outweight
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outweigh
 the drawbacks.
To begin
 with, studying a
secound
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second
language
 with advanced
age
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 it difficult to understand and
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familiarised
 it
due to
 less time to learn it, with
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 lot of other academic and
non academic
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 matters burden over a youngster. As they more
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prioritised
prioritise
 the important subjects like maths and science which needed for their higher studies they
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easily
 ignore the importance of another
lanuage
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language
. For
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,in my
secoundary
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secondary
school
days
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 even the students who were the top in the class did not get marks over 75 for the
secound
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second
language
 of Tamil.
Therefore
,
this
 clearly depicts the
ignorence
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ignorance
 and less
familerization
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familiarization
 of
a
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language
 learning at
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the secoundary
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secoundary
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secondary
 college
level
.
On the other hand
 , familiarization
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in
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 a younger
age
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in
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fluency of
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. Kids have a more openness at
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their
there
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language
center
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 in the brain at younger ages, and
this
 lead to easily understand and familiarised
a
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another
language
 .
For example
according to
a
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research done by
oxford university science student
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Oxford University Science Student
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student
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Students
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 who are
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 to a non-native
langhuge
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language
 before 10
yrs
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years
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 of their
age
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 a 90% chance
to
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 fluency in that.
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, letting them
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learn
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 external
language
 at
primary
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level
make
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 it
easire
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easier
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familiearised
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familiarised
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. In conclusion, offshore languages are difficult to learn
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 adolescence
age
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overburden
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 with other more important subject matter
while
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to
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learn these
in
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 a younger
age
,
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according
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 brain, allows easy learning with more fluency. As
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this
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belife
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belief
beliefs
 that the
advntages
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advantages
 of children
to begin
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learning a foreign
language
 at
primary
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the primary
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scool
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school
level
outweight
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outweigh
outweighed
 the disadvantages.
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Task Achievement
Ensure your essay introduction clearly answers the question and presents your standpoint. A clearer, more concise introduction will help readers understand your position from the beginning.
Coherence & Cohesion
Enhance coherence by ordering ideas logically, using paragraphs to separate different points, and employing clear topic sentences to introduce the main idea of each paragraph.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on cohesion by better integrating examples and explanations. Use linking words effectively to show the relationship between ideas within and across paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Increase specificity in your arguments by providing detailed, specific examples to support them. Instead of making general statements, use real-world evidence or hypothetical scenarios to illustrate your point more vividly.
General
Address spelling, grammar, and vocabulary errors. Frequent mistakes can obscure your meaning and weaken your argument. Practice using varied sentence structures and expanding your vocabulary to more accurately express your ideas.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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