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Some experts believe that school it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primaryrather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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A number of specialists
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 that
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ideal
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 time to start learning
on
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a non-native
language
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 is at the elementary
school
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level
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school
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. In my conviction , learning foreign
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tongue
 later makes the students
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 with all other academic
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 in
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secondary
 educational institutional status.
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,
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exposure
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school
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let
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be fluent in a
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language
 and more
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to learn.
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, I think the
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benefits
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second
toungue
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tongue
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outweigh
 the drawbacks.
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second
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 it difficult to understand and
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familiarised
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 lot of other academic and
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 matters burden over a youngster. As they more
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prioritised
prioritise
 the important subjects like maths and science which needed for their higher studies they
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easily
 ignore the importance of another
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language
. For
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,in my
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secondary
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 even the students who were the top in the class did not get marks over 75 for the
secound
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second
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 of Tamil.
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,
this
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 clearly depicts the
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ignorance
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familiarization
 of
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language
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secoundary
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secondary
 college
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.
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let
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 for a
more
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in
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fluency of
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. Kids have a more openness at
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their
there
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language
center
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 in the brain at younger ages, and
this
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another
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according to
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research done by
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 who are
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 to a non-native
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language
 before 10
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 of their
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 a 90% chance
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, letting them
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learn
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primary
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level
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easier
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familiearised
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familiarised
familiarise
. In conclusion, offshore languages are difficult to learn
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 with other more important subject matter
while
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learn these
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 a younger
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,
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according
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 brain, allows easy learning with more fluency. As
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belife
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belief
beliefs
 that the
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advantages
 of children
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to begin
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learning a foreign
language
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 at
primary
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the primary
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scool
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school
level
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outweight
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outweigh
outweighed
 the disadvantages.

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Task Achievement
Ensure your essay introduction clearly answers the question and presents your standpoint. A clearer, more concise introduction will help readers understand your position from the beginning.
Coherence & Cohesion
Enhance coherence by ordering ideas logically, using paragraphs to separate different points, and employing clear topic sentences to introduce the main idea of each paragraph.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on cohesion by better integrating examples and explanations. Use linking words effectively to show the relationship between ideas within and across paragraphs.
Task Achievement
Increase specificity in your arguments by providing detailed, specific examples to support them. Instead of making general statements, use real-world evidence or hypothetical scenarios to illustrate your point more vividly.
General
Address spelling, grammar, and vocabulary errors. Frequent mistakes can obscure your meaning and weaken your argument. Practice using varied sentence structures and expanding your vocabulary to more accurately express your ideas.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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