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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
#water #usage #san #diego #california #rest #world
The chart
has showed
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shows
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 the information
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on that
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that
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the
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use
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uses
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 of
water
 in San
Diego
County
,
California
 and the rest of the world, and
separate
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separates
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 the types of
water
usage
to
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into
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 residential,
industry
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industrial
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 and
agriculture
. First of all, we
concerned
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are concerned
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 about
the
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apply
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residential
use
. In San
Diego
County
, the residential
use
 is far more than the other two types,
it
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apply
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 almost at 60%.
Secondly
, in
California
the
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residential
water
usage
also
 accounts for
the
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39%. But the situation is totally different
in
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apply
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Worldwide, it
take
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takes
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 over a little place just
accounts
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accounting
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 for 8%.And
then
 ,change our sights to the industry
water
usage
. The proportion in
three
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the three
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area
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areas
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 are very similar, there are nearly 33%
in
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of
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 residential was account in
California
, and the residential
use
 is equal in Sand
Diego
County
 and Worldwide, at 23%. There are
quit
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quite
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different
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differences
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 in
agriculture
use
, it takes the majority
in
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apply
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worldwide almost at 69%, and in
California
 just
account
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accounts
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 for 28%.In San
Diego
County
,
it
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apply
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only 17%
agriculture
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of agriculture
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Add a missing verb
is use
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use
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used
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 at all. In summary,
the
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apply
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water
usage
 is consumed by homes, industry and
agriculture
 proportions, different place has different
situation
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situations
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,
it
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and it
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affect
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is affected
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 by many factors.Obversely,
agriculture
use
play
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plays
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the
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a
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 role character of
the
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apply
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water
usage
 in the world.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, water, diego, county, california, usage, agriculture with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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