The charts show information concerning speed-camera use, together with statistics on road accidents, for the city of Melbourne. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The bar chart and map illustrate the number of speed

cameras

as well as

the proportion of accidents and

deaths

in road of Melbourne from 2002 to 2005.

Overall

,

it is clear that

deaths

and accidents

were

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increased in Melbourne even

high

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though high

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numbers of speed

cameras

were situated.

According to

the bar chart shows that, at the beginning, around 30

cameras

were installed

thereafter

, it was increased slightly by ten in the following year. In 2004,

cameras

were installed at 60, one year later there was a significant increase of installed

cameras

on

road

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, at 140. In terms of map indicates that, in 2002,

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the deaths

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deaths

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death

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ratio situated

at

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below one

percentage

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per cent

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, next year, it decreased slightly

at

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just above 0.5 per

cent

.

Then

, there was a significant growth at 1% in 2004.

Thereafter

, the percentage of

deaths

increased rapidly from 2004 to 2005 and fell gradually and reached just above 1 per

cent

in 2005.

In contrast

, accidents on the road at

beginning

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, it was just above 3

percentage

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per cent

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then

it was decreased slightly

at

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just under 3%. In 2003, from 2004 to 2005, there was a gradual increase from 3 per

cent

to almost 4 per

cent

in the final period.