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the graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. summarize the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. summarize the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the expenses of UK societies on going abroad from 1993 to 2013 in three different
type
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 of activities.
Overall
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,
holiday
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the holiday
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 was the most activities of UK
peoples
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people
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 in spending their own money. Meanwhile, miscellaneous activities
beside
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holiday
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holidays
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, business and
visit
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visiting
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 friends were the lowest expenditure of UK residents. Looking in more detail, there
were
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 9 billons pounds of expenditure
in
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on
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holiday
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a holiday
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 abroad in 1993,
then
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, it experienced a
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significant
 increase and reached a high point
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 around 25
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billions
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 in 2008 before had fallen to 22
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billions
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billion
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 in 2009 and it backed up again to nearly 24
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billions
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 over 4 years.
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, business started at only approximately 2
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billions
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of
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 expenses in 1993, after that, it faced a slight rise to roughly 5
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billions
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 pound a year in 2008 before it fluctuated and remained stable at 5
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billions
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 in 2013.
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, there
were
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 a gradual increase
of
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in
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 spending money
in
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on
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 visiting friends or family from 2
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billions
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 to just under 5
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billions pound
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billion pounds
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 during 15 years. The lowest are miscellaneous
beside
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 the three
activites
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activities
 that have
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mention
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 above. It
underwent
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 up and down over twenty years from nearly zero to around 1 billion
pound
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pounds
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 of expenditure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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