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now a days pollution and wastages levels are increasing rapidly.How does this affect ordinary people what steps can be taken to overcome this

#pollution #wastages #levels #affect #people #steps
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Pollution
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 is one of the major
threat
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people
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 face nowadays and recently, the level of
waste
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 production
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pollution
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 is inclining dramatically which leads to many
issues
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.
This
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pollution
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 affects ordinary
people
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 and provide some possible solutions.
First
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 and foremost problem is
outbreak
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an outbreak
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 of various diseases for
public
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the public
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. Since
pollution
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contaminate
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contaminates
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 the
environment
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 in numerous ways, it leads to
vast
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a vast
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 number of health
issues
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 for
people
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 especially children and old
people
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.
For example
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, because of the emissions from vehicles and factories,
lot
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 of individuals suffer from lung and breathing problems and it may cause cancer as well.
Furthermore
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, disposal of
waste
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materials
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in to
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into
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 the water bodies
such
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river
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rivers
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, lakes, ponds and seas leads to numerous
water-born
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water-borne
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 diseases
such
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 as cholera,
diarrhea
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diarrhoea
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, kidney
issues
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 and so on.
Therefore
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 ordinary
people
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 are affected by
pollution
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in
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at
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 a great level. One possible solution for the above problems is
implementation
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the implementation
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 of proper
waste
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 management systems. Government should allocate more funds for the proper removal of
wastages
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waste
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 from the
environment
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as well as
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 encourage recycling of plastic and polythenes
materials
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.
Moreover
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, it should give importance to environmentally friendly products. Another possible remedy is imposing strict rules and regulations against the factors causing
pollution
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. Authorities should charge strict fines and penalties
from
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to
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the
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people
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disposing
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disposing of
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 wastages and harmful
materials
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 in the
environment
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, as well as the emission test of factories and vehicles,
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as well as
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 the emission test of factories and vehicles should be made strict. Through these steps, we can able to minimize the obstacles faced by ordinary
people
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 because of
pollution
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 and
waste
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materials
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.
To conclude
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,
enormous
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an enormous
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 level of
wastages
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waste
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 and
pollution
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 in the
environment
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 leads to various
issues
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to
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for
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the
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people
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. It creates many problems
to
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for
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 ordinary
people
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 and can be avoided
by
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with
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 some steps as I have mentioned above.
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