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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
number
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 of trips made by
children
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 in one country from 1990 to 2010
and
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using different types of transport. The figure gives
a
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the
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 total
number
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 of trips per
years
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year
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 unit by millions.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in 1990 most
of
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teenarger
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teenager
teenagers
 preferred the journey to
school
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 by walking.
In contrast
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, in 2010 most
children
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trevel
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travelled
 to
school
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 by car passenger. Looking
in
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at
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 the
1990
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1990s
 era, there were using car passengers around 4.5
million
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 per year.
In addition
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,some
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children's
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children
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 preferred cycling and
also
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 within
teenager's
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teenagers
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 who
were
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apply
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preferred walking and the bus has
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number
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a number
the number
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 of travel to around 6.2
million
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 and approximately 5.9
million
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, respectively. Turning
in
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to
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 the 2010 century,
look at
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apply
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the
number
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 lowest for preferred travel to
school
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 is cycling has around 2
million
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 in
this
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 era.
On the other hand
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, many
children
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also
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 preferred
travel
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to travel
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 to
school
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which
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apply
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walking
abour
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about
 6
million
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 per year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, children, school, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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