The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the
number
of trips made by
children
in one country from 1990 to 2010
and
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using different types of transport. The figure gives
a
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the
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total
number
of trips per
years
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year
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unit by millions.
Overall
, it can be seen that in 1990 most
of
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teenarger
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teenager
teenagers
preferred the journey to
school
by walking.
In contrast
, in 2010 most
children
trevel
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travelled
to
school
by car passenger. Looking
in
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at
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the
1990
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1990s
era, there were using car passengers around 4.5
million
per year.
In addition
,some
children's
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children
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preferred cycling and
also
within
teenager's
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teenagers
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who
were
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preferred walking and the bus has
number
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a number
the number
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of travel to around 6.2
million
and approximately 5.9
million
, respectively. Turning
in
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to
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the 2010 century,
look at
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the
number
lowest for preferred travel to
school
is cycling has around 2
million
in
this
era.
On the other hand
, many
children
also
preferred
travel
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to travel
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to
school
which
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walking
abour
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about
6
million
per year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, children, school, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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