The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010.
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compares the percentage of Correct your spelling
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men
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male
participants
in senior development in three software companies namely IBN, Microsoft
and Apple
from 1980 to 2010. Overall
, it is clear that
the figures increased throughout the years
, while
IBM
employed the highest number
of participants
.
In 1980, 5 percent
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per cent
senior positioned
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senior-positioned
men
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at
IBM
company
. However
, in Apple
company
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company,
number
of participants
was higher in that year to 15 percent
. After 10 years
, 11 and 10 percent
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of
in
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by
IBM
and Microsoft
companies respectively.
There was a significant rise in IBM
company
in 1995, the figure reached 25 percent
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participants
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of participants
While
in Microsoft
company
almost 15 percent
of men
in senior development position
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Apple
company
, more than 20 percent
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men
were employed. After five years
, the number
of employers
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employees
IBM
company
overcame all other companies by 32 percent
. However
, the number
of Apple
’s employers
decreased to 29 Correct your spelling
employees
percent
. While
in Microsoft
the same number
of participants
worked as it was 5 years
ago. In 2010, IBM
company
reached almost the
peak Correct article usage
a
by
65 Change preposition
of
percent
. While
Microsoft
and Apple
companies’
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participants
grew to 45 and 25 percent
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