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the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The line graph illustrates the choices of European people for consuming the variation of protein in
term
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terms
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 of
fish
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, lamb,
beef
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, and chicken in the period of 2,5 decades starting
form
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from
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 1979 until 2004. As we can see, in
general
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general,
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the
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apply
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fish
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 consumption
was remain
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remained
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 constant,
while
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 the
the
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apply
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number
for
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of
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chicken's
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chicken
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chosing
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choosing
 had increased
continuily
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continually
continuously
continuity
.
According to
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 the data, at the beginning of 1979,
beef
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 was the first favourite protein in the European country.
In contrast
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,
fish
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 was less choice, but the trend for consuming the
fish
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was remain
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remained
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 constant.
On the other hand
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, the trend for
meat's
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meat
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 consumption
was
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is
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drammatically
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dramatically
fall
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falling
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.
In addition
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, it is interesting to see that the lamb's
admire
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admiration
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 was
same
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the same
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to
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as
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 the
beef
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's. It was
decrease
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decreased
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 over
the
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apply
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time. All in all,
at
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in
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 the year 2004,
the
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apply
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chicken
had
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was
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 been
becoming
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apply
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most
populer
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popular
 protein chosen, followed by
the
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apply
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beef
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 and
the
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apply
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lamb in the second and third options, respectively.
While
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 the less common choice was the
fish
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 and it
still
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was still
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 the same
at
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in
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 the year 1979 which on the fourth rank
compare
Wrong verb form
compared
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 with the others.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, beef with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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