the graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a european country between 1979 and 2004. summarise the infomrations by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The line graph illustrates the choices of European people for consuming the variation of protein in
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
fish
, lamb, beef
, and chicken in the period of 2,5 decades starting form
1979 until 2004. As we can see, in Correct your spelling
from
general
Add the comma(s)
general,
the
Correct article usage
apply
fish
consumption was remain
constant, Change the verb form
remained
while
the the
number Remove the redundancy
apply
for
Change preposition
of
chicken's
Change noun form
chicken
chosing
had increased Correct your spelling
choosing
continuily
.
Correct your spelling
continually
continuously
continuity
According to
the data, at the beginning of 1979, beef
was the first favourite protein in the European country. In contrast
, fish
was less choice, but the trend for consuming the fish
was remain
constant. Change the verb form
remained
On the other hand
, the trend for meat's
consumption Change noun form
meat
was
Wrong verb form
is
drammatically
Correct your spelling
dramatically
fall
. Wrong verb form
falling
In addition
, it is interesting to see that the lamb's admire
was Replace the word
admiration
same
Correct article usage
the same
to
the Change preposition
as
beef
's. It was decrease
over Wrong verb form
decreased
the
time.
All in all, Correct article usage
apply
at
the year 2004, Change preposition
in
the
chicken Correct article usage
apply
had
been Verb problem
was
becoming
most Verb problem
apply
populer
protein chosen, followed by Correct your spelling
popular
the
Correct article usage
apply
beef
and the
lamb in the second and third options, respectively. Correct article usage
apply
While
the less common choice was the fish
and it still
the same Add a missing verb
was still
at
the year 1979 which on the fourth rank Change preposition
in
compare
with the others.Wrong verb form
compared
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, beef with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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