Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?
These days more population of people choose fast
food
as their base line
of everyday diet. Correct your spelling
baseline
This
lifestyle has its own benefits and drawbacks in humans
lives which in Fix the agreement mistake
human
this
passage are going to be discussed.
On one hand, the reason behind this
trend is as plain as day; because people nowadays are too much
involved in Correct quantifier usage
apply
work
field, busy trying to make money, Add an article
the work
therefore
they do not have enough time
to cook food
at home and it is an easier option to just order it from a fast food
restaurant. This
selection for sure has its own beneficial points such
as thrift in time
, being able to eat various kinds of food
at anytime
and so much more. Correct your spelling
any time
Furthermore
, it is clear that
all fast foods
are not harmful, for example
, some restaurants may make salads, sushi or local foods
which are actually tonic for health and can be delicious at the same time
.
Although
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On the other hand
, most majority of fast foods
are not healthy, fruitful or nourishing. As a matter of fact, society calls them junk foods
, because of its
amount of cholesterol and fat Change the word
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they
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our body, and with Change preposition
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increase
of those chemicals in our blood, the risk of heart attack Add an article
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also
growth
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In addition
, researches
have shown that eating junk Correct your spelling
researchers
foods
for a long period of time
can elevate Correct article usage
the risks
risks
of getting stomach cancer.
In conclusion, choosing fast Fix the agreement mistake
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foods
as basis
of a person's diet can Add an article
the basis
results
in both a healthy, beneficial diet or a harmful, unhealthy one which can be dangerous for people's health.Change the verb form
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