Nowadays more and more people consume fast food on a regular basis. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

These days more population of people choose fast
food
as their
base line
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of everyday diet.
This
lifestyle has its own benefits and drawbacks in
humans
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lives which in
this
passage are going to be discussed. On one hand, the reason behind
this
trend is as plain as day; because people nowadays are too
much
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involved in
work
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field, busy trying to make money,
therefore
they do not have enough
time
to cook
food
at home and it is an easier option to just order it from a fast
food
restaurant.
This
selection for sure has its own beneficial points
such
as thrift in
time
, being able to eat various kinds of
food
at
anytime
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and so much more.
Furthermore
,
it is clear that
all fast
foods
are not harmful,
for example
, some restaurants may make salads, sushi or local
foods
which are actually tonic for health and can be delicious at the same
time
.
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On the other hand
, most majority of fast
foods
are not healthy, fruitful or nourishing. As a matter of fact, society calls them junk
foods
, because of
its
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amount of cholesterol and fat
it
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enters
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to
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our body, and with
increase
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of those chemicals in our blood, the risk of heart attack
would
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also
growth
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.
In addition
,
researches
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researchers
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have shown that eating junk
foods
for a long period of
time
can elevate
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the risks
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risks
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of getting stomach cancer. In conclusion, choosing fast
foods
as
basis
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of a person's diet can
results
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in both a healthy, beneficial diet or a harmful, unhealthy one which can be dangerous for people's health.
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