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In many countries, fast food become spart of everyday life. It affects people’s lifestyle and diet as well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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There is no objective fact that
this
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 statement about fast
food
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become
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becoming
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spart
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part
 of everyday life is prevalent in our reality because of its importance. Most people agree with
this
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 statement because of its many benefits.
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, some of the people highlight its disadvantages first. My next paragraphs will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the same. Describing the different types of advantages, the first and foremost advantage is that
the
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apply
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fast
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food
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food is
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 more convenient
of
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for
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 everyday life .
For example
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 when you want to eat some
food
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 in the street and you
have
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do have
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 not any time to go home and
to
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apply
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eat different
portion
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portions
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 of healthy foods. Another advantage that might come to people's minds might
that
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be that
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 fast
food
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more
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is more
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 tasty
that
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 others. On its darker side, there are some flaws that make it problematic and worrying, I would like to highlight 2 flaws
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, Fast
food
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 is not good for health.
Second,
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children more to like fast
food
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than
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 adults and it is unhealthy.
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, They like a lot of fries
instead
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 of fresh fruits and other
type
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types
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healthy
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of healthy
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 foods. I think there are many shortcomings of
this
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 kind and we can talk about
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 topic all the time. Concluding the above statement, neither its pros nor its cons can be ignored. In my opinion, the positive and negative sides are mixed processes that follow each other and
it
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 should be considered more generalized,
therefore
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 I remain of the opinion that it is not necessary to ignore the advantages and disadvantages and to outline their impact in reality.

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Introduction
Consider opening your essay with a more direct statement or thesis to establish your viewpoint from the beginning. This will also help tie your introduction more closely to the question asked.
Paragraph Structure
Work on developing more distinct and clear paragraph structures. Each main point should start in a new paragraph with a topic sentence followed by support and examples.
Supporting Information
When presenting advantages and disadvantages, ensure each point is clearly explained and supported with specific, relevant examples. This strengthens your argument and makes your writing more persuasive.
Content Depth
Avoid general statements that don't add value to your argument. Instead, focus on providing more in-depth analysis and examples to back up your claims.
Grammar and Vocabulary
Check your essay for grammatical errors and incorrect word choices. Improving your grammar and vocabulary will make your arguments clearer and more professional.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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