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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013
#people #usa #fast-food #shops
Looking at the chart ,a piece of information about how common fast
food
 was among
people
 in
USA
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the USA
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 in 2003,2006 and 2013. At
the
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first glance , it can be clearly seen that once a
week
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choise
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choice
 was the most widespread
troughout
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throughout
 all years.
To begin
 with, below 5% of society ate fast
food
 every day in all illustrated years,and
the
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 similar pattern is shown when it comes to
people
 who have never
ate
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eaten
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this
 type of
food
.
However
, the chart demonstrates that in 2003 there were just under 10% of
thosewho prefered
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those who preferred
 it a few
times
 a year , and
this
 rate
grown
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 to 15% and
ramained
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remained
 stable during
following
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the following
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 2 years which are described.
In addition
, in 2003 and 2013 just under 15% of
people
 bought fast
food
 several
times
 a week,
nevertheless
 ,in 2006 the level was one-fifth of
total
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the total
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100
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of 100
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%. What is noticeable,is that in 2003 the top of the statistics reached those who ate it one or 4
times
 per
mount
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month
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 and their percentage
were
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was
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 nearly 30 for both,
while
 in 2006
once
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a
week
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weak
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choise
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choice
 became more common,followed by
the
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a
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 drop in 2013.
In contrast
,
this
 year
characterised
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was characterised
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with
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by
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the
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an
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 increase in the rate of those who bought it once or 2
times
 per month.
Overall
, if
this
 trend continues , there will be more
people
 who eat fast
food
few
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a few
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times
 monthly.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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