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Some people believe that the activities of large multinational corporations mostly benefit the economies of developing countries. Other people take the opposite view and feel that these large multinationals are generally harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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There is a growing belief that the
existance
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existence
 of big multinational
companies
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contribute
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contributes
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 to the economic growth of developing
coutries
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countries
.
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, there are
also
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 people who think that these
companies
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 are only benefitting themselves and harm others. In my opinion, apart from the harm they may cause, these large multinationals
also
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 provide some significant benefits for the locals. Activities undertaken by industries in one
country
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 will create more jobs and involve the local
communites
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communities
community
 on the field. As
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consequences
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, it leads to
a
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better employment.
This
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 condition will result
to
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 the reduction of poverty in the particular
country
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,
as well as
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 promoting their economic growth.
For example
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, Tesla's battery factory in Indonesia helps to reduce unemployment in
this
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country
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 by 15% just after 2 years.
On the other hand
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, it is commonly known that big
companies
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 build their factory in developing
countries
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 because it seems to be an easier option.
First,
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it allows them to reduce their operational cost by paying the local workers under the minimum wage they would paid in developed
countries
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.
Second,
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most developing
countries
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 are known for lacking
of
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environmental regulations.
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, for
companies
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, it can help them to avoid
to fulfil
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 their obligations relating to the environment.
As a result
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, many developing
countries
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,
such
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 as Indonesia and Vietnam, experience
a
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severe pollution and
general
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a general
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 decrease in environmental quality
due to
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 the
existance
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existence
 of big
industries'
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industries
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factories
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and factories
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 in their
country
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.
To conclude
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,
activities
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the activities
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 of big
companies
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 in developing
countries
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 may contribute to
the
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apply
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economical
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economic
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 growth as well reducing poverty in the particular
country
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.
However
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,
government
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the government
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 should take part
to reduce
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in reducing
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the negative
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negative
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the negative
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 impact of these corporations' activities. Local
goverment
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government
governments
 should help to regulate the minimum wage and the environmental obligations of the company.

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