People from many countries are marrying later and having fewer children. Give reasons why this is happening. Are there any positive or negative developments regarding this?
In today’s world, it is alarming,
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newborn
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newborns
in
countrywide causes government concern about Change preposition
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this
situation. This
essay will examine the cause of the couples
delay in Change noun form
couple's
couples'
wedding
and both of advantages and disadvantages Correct article usage
the wedding
impacts
that Verb problem
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marriage
later and having fewer kids.
Nowadays, young people
are delaying marriage
because of economic stability and
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which
lead
to problems of financial to Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
people
, which is considered to this
, so, they have aimed to achieve financial stability before the wedding. In addition
, marriage
can bring to
divorce problems in future because the couples tend to be living together without marrying. Change preposition
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Moreover
, by
research in Thailand, Change preposition
according to
people
who have high
education Correct article usage
a high
over
master’s degree Correct word choice
and over
concerned
about Add a missing verb
are concerned
society
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society's
problem
if they have a kid, making decide to adopt a pet Fix the agreement mistake
problems
instead
. However
, having a kid when success the life, that
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which
sound
is interesting, but difficult to have a Correct subject-verb agreement
sounds
baby
when older ages because issue heathy with pregnancy by women.
However
, it is undeniable that an increasing of
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economy
and have labor sources in Add an article
the economy
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developing countries, but have negative Correct the article-noun agreement
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such
as, in
Thailand Change preposition
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have
a traditional culture that if women and men Correct subject-verb agreement
has
to be
live together should wedding immediately, making Verb problem
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marriage
when young, which occur divorces is rising than before because people
spent short time together and, if they have a baby
and not able to take care of children closer may lead to society problem accordingly
. Additionally
, the factor is an
important is the standard of salary is lower than the cost of living, making parents unable support to their children fully.
In conclusion, it seems the couple avoid Correct article usage
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delay
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the delay
to marry
and having little children or no have Change preposition
in marrying
because
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because of
concern
the effect Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
by
economic conditions Change preposition
of
to
themselves and Change preposition
on
baby
in future. So, authorities should have policies Correct article usage
the baby
encourage
and create Fix the infinitive
to encourage
confident
have a Replace the word
confidence
baby
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