the diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in Australian towns.

The graph above shows us the

process

of collecting the rainwater for drinking

water

which is used in Australian

town

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towns

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.

Overall

it’s visible that the

process

starts with collecting flowing

water

and finishes after a big purifying

process

by adding chemicals into

this

uncleaned

water

.

Firstly

the rainwater

is flowing

Wrong verb form

flows

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to the roof what after it goes through

drain

Correct article usage

a drain

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and moves to

water

Correct article usage

the water

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filter in order to

being

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be

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cleaned, after it accumulates in storage where the all uncleaned

water

gathered

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is gathered

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, after

what

Correct word choice

that

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it moves to

water

treatment with the help of

water

tube. After a hard and long

process

, chemicals are

being

Unnecessary verb

apply

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added to

water

in order to make it pure and drinkable.

Finally

Add a comma

Finally,

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it goes straight to houses by

water

tubes in a drinkable and pure condition.

And

Correct word choice

This

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this

is

the

Change the article

apply

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hard but at the same time useful

process

of rainwater

being

Verb problem

becoming

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drinkable in Australian towns.