The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018
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The bar chart demonstrates data about how each
household
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's income was allocated in different categories between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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leisure activities had the highest share in average consumption costs of each
families
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family
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,
while
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that of food was the least. Average spending on leisure activities rose from approximately 8
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percent
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per cent
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to nearly 23 % between 1968 and 2018.
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, in these years, the average spending by families increased by 6
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percent
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per cent
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for transportation and 8
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percent
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per cent
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for
household
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chores. In 1968 every
household
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spent most on food,
according to
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35% of their income per week
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in 2018,
this
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figure decreased by almost 17
percent
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.
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,
expenditure
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expenditures
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on fuel and power, personal goods and clothing and footwear all had a depletion to no more than 5
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percent
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per cent
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of weekly income between 1968 and 2018.
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money spent on
household
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goods remained at roughly 7%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, percent with synonyms.
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