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The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.

The given line chart illustrates the number of people in the UK commuting daily by three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
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the line graph depicts
the
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information about how much individuals were
traveling
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travelling
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 by three different vehicles over a six decades
periods
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period
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 between 1970 and 2030 after the analysis, it is clearly stated that the number of
people
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 who used to travel by car
were
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was
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 about 5
million
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 in 1970 after three years straight the pattern did not change and went on increasing
then
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 in 2010 a small dip was seen and again it numbers sky
rockted
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rocketed
rocked
 and reaches its peak to 9
million
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moreover
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, in 1970 few
people
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 using train almost 2
million
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then
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 the passengers start to rose for 4 decades
furthermore
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, the same dip was seen surpassing the bus transport and the figure went up afterwards touching almost 6
million
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, on the other
hands
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, the bus transport used by
people
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in
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at
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 the
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beginning
begaining
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beginning
 of the year
were
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 considered the second option
then
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 the number
start
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started
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 to decreased in 1980 but the pattern did not change its direction and start to fell down for 5 decades
staright
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straight
overall
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, it is vividly manifested that all three transport used by
people
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 showed fluctuation in each
periods
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 of time but the car was mostly used and
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convenient
covenient
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convenient
 transportation and the interest
of
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in
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 using
bus
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the bus
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start
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started
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 to
decreased
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decrease
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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