The chart below shows three different crimes and the number of cases committed between 1970 and 2005 in England and Wales. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates the
number
of crimes
that occur in England and Wales in the period during
1970 until 2005. As we can see, in general Change preposition
from
the
Correct article usage
apply
car
theft is the highest number
of crimes
that occurs
over Correct subject-verb agreement
occur
the
time.
Correct article usage
apply
According to
the data, at the beginning of 1970, the number
of criminal cases are very low. There was not
street Correct your spelling
no
robbery
at all, while
the house burgling was about 0,20 million casess
. Correct your spelling
cases
In addition
, the number
of car
theft
was about twice Fix the agreement mistake
thefts
than
Correct word choice
that
the
house Change preposition
of the
burgling
. Correct your spelling
burglar
Furthermore
, each types
of Change to a singular noun
type
the
Correct article usage
apply
crimes
Fix the agreement mistake
crime
were
Wrong verb form
is
growth
. If we look at the data, Replace the word
growing
it is clear that
the
street Correct article usage
apply
robbery
is the less
Rephrase
least
occuring
criminal. In the year 2005, the reported cases Correct your spelling
common
is
just 0,20 million. Change the verb form
are
Whereas
, the crime of house burgling was fluctuated
but it still increased by around 0,30 million in 2005. Change to the active voice
fluctuated
has fluctuated
On the other hand
, it interesting
to see that the Add a missing verb
is interesting
number
of car
robbery
reached a peak in 1995.
All in all, the Fix the agreement mistake
robberies
number
of crimes
that occur in England and Wales increased. Especially for the car
robbery
, the cases still
the highest than others.Add a missing verb
are still
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, crimes, car, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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