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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.
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bar chart provides information about how much proportion of
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 was spent on
healthcare
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services
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 in twelve different countries of Europe in three different years including, 2002, 2007 and 2012.
overall
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it is clear that
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 Switzerland spends the highest and same proportion of
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 on
healthcare
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services
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 in all three years
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 Estonia spends less. In all three years, Spain, Belgium, and Switzerland
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 maintained similar levels of spending, with approximately 8%, 10%, and 11% of their
GDP
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 invested in the
healthcare
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 sectors from which Switzerland's expenditure was slightly highest than other countries, but in 2007 France did the similar level of spending, around 11% of the
GDP
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 on
healthcare
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services
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.
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, Estonia spends the lowest proportion of
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 on medical care around 3% respectively.
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, Lithuania, Poland, and Slovenia's spending increased over the year and in 2012, the expenditure was around 6%, 7%, and 9% respectively,
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 the Netherlands and Luxembourg's spending decreased over a ten-year period, and they utilized about 8% and 7% of their
GDP
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 on the medical
services
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 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, healthcare, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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