The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres.

The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at

three health centres.
The chart illustrates how patients score different services at three medical
facility
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facilities
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. In the First medical facility, Longston
centre
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Centre
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, these aspects are scored in
this
way: Booking appointments is 5.2, meaning that it is mid-range. The next aspect is doctor's service, with 8.0, which is very good. After that goes care of children with
rating
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6.3
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of 6.3
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. What is more, pharmacy and responding to concerns are rated at 5.1 and 4.3, meaning that there should be work done in order to improve. After that comes Perevil
centre
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, with scores of 9.1 for appointment opportunities, 8.7 for doctor's service, 7.5 for care of children, and 9.6 for responding to concerns.
Nevertheless
, the pharmacy's rating is lower than others, 6.3.
In contrast
with the second clinic, the
last
, Marchbank, has been given a slightly lower rating,
such
as 7.8, 8.4, 7.3, 5.8, and 6.5, respectively.
Overall
, after counting all of the points from these 3 clinics, it is
needles
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to say that these points highlight the crucial issues in each aspect of those 3 participants.
While
Perevil Centre has the highest point, 8.3 and has the minimum amount of work to do, other clinics have the opposite situation.
For instance
,
Longston
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Langston
or Marchbank healthcare facility,
which
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has 5.3 and 7.2.
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