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An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

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Nowadays, doctors and teachers play a vital role in daily life.
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, in poor
countries
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,professional doctors and teachers prefer to go abroad
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 of working in their own
countries
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. I believe that
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 situation is the biggest problem for poorer
countries
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 and it must be solved. In today's world, most of the people are very concerned about their future.
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this
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 reason, in poor
countries
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, people prefer to go
foreign
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to foreign
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countries
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 for their future plans and careers.
This
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circumtance
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circumstance
 can be caused by many problems and
lack
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 of many sources. First of all, poverty is the biggest cause because
professionals
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 want to live
inhigh
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in high
 quality life
standarts
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standards
.
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, they want to provide better opportunities for their families and children.
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, they go to different
countries
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for working
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to work
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 if they might earn
more
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a higher
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 salary.
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, my aunt is working at
hospital
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the hospital
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 and she puts a lot of effort into her job.
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, her salary is approximately equal
with
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 ordinary workers.
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this
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 reason, she
want
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 to work in different continents. There are too many solutions in order to solve
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 problem. Some precautions should be taken by governments.
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, more schools ought to be built and education systems must be reorganized. These developments could give hope to
professionals
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 and citizens because
good
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 future can be created with only excellent education.
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, citizens can be more polite toward
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professionals
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. They can provide a better working environment.
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Countries-which
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Countries
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 are
suffered
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suffer
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 from
poverty-have
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poverty have
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 a lot of economic and financial issues. If
goverments
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governments
government
 can achieve to make successful investments, they can prevent
to
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apply
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brain immigration. In conclusion, doctors and teachers are special
professionals
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 for their
countries
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. In poorer
countries
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,
professionals
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 abandon their
countries
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 rapidly. Citizens and governments should
aware
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 of
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 important topic. They should start to find some solutions and attempts in order to solve brain immigration problems.

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coherence cohesion
Clearly organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea, supported by specific examples or reasons. This will help improve the logical structure of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction and conclusion that clearly outline the problem and the proposed solutions. Your introduction should present the topic clearly, and your conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your position.
task achievement
To fully address the task, ensure you equally discuss both the problems caused by the migration of professionals from poorer to developed countries and the potential solutions to these problems. Both aspects should be explored in detail.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your main points wherever possible. This helps to make your ideas clear and comprehensive. While you gave an example involving your aunt, try to include broader examples or statistics that strengthen your arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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