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The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The bar chart depicts the
percentage
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 of international and the
percentage
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 of
UK
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students
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gaineding
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gaining
second
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class
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degress
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degree
degrees
 or better at a major
UK
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 University. In the
graph
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 we can see that more international
students
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 gaining
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second
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second-class
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class
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 degrees or better in electrical engineering and
in
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information technology than
UK
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students
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.
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However
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However,
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 more
UK
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students
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 are better in
Englis
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English
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 literature,
and
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apply
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history, sociology and
Internation
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International
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 law. In
fact
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fact,
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 the highest
percentage
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 is 85%,
this
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 is the number of international
students
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 who gained
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second
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second-class
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class
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degress
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degrees
degree
 or better in information
techonology
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technology
, and the highest
percentage
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 of
UK
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students
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 is around 80%
this
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 is the student who gained
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second
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second-class
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class
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desrees
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degrees
degree
 or better in art history. In summary,
UK
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students
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 are better in the
humanaties
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humanities
while
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Internatiol
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international
student
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students
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 are better in technical sciences
,
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 because there are completely more
Uk
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students
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gained
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who gained
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second
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second-class
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class
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degress
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degrees
degree
 or better in
the
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apply
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humanitis
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humanities
 in 2009.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, uk, students, second, class with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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