The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. Write at least 150 words.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK university.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart depicts the
percentage
of international and the
percentage
of
UK
students
gaineding
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gaining
second
class
degress
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degree
degrees
or better at a major
UK
University. In the
graph
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we can see that more international
students
gaining
second
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second-class
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class
degrees or better in electrical engineering and
in
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information technology than
UK
students
.
However
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However,
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more
UK
students
are better in
Englis
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English
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literature,
and
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history, sociology and
Internation
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International
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law. In
fact
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fact,
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the highest
percentage
is 85%,
this
is the number of international
students
who gained
second
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second-class
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class
degress
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degrees
degree
or better in information
techonology
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technology
, and the highest
percentage
of
UK
students
is around 80%
this
is the student who gained
second
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second-class
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class
desrees
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degrees
degree
or better in art history. In summary,
UK
students
are better in the
humanaties
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humanities
while
Internatiol
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international
student
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students
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are better in technical sciences
,
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because there are completely more
Uk
students
gained
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who gained
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second
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second-class
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class
degress
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degrees
degree
or better in
the
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apply
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humanitis
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humanities
in 2009.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, uk, students, second, class with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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