The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pie charts demonstrate the average household expenditures which are divided into five categories including housing, transportation,
food
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, health care and other goods and services in Japan and Malaysia in 2010.
Overall
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, it appears similar trends between the two nations which are
food
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and housing were the main sources of spending household budget followed by transportation fees and
lastly
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, citizens spent their funds on taking care of health the least. Looking at the charts more closely,
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the Japanese spent 24% of their money on
food
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and 21% on housing, Malaysians
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their budget most on housing garnering 34% and the
food
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sector took up 27% which was the second largest consumption. One of the noticeable facts is that the percentages of Japanese spending on both transport and health care were double the amount of Malaysian people’s expenditure, in detail, when the measures of Japanese were 20% and 6% respectively, Malaysian’s were 10% and 3% each.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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