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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the advancement
pf
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of
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 cutting
tools
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 in the Stone
sge
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Age
.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
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tools
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tool
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 A were dark and had many hedges
while
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 the
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tools
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tool
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B
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 which
were
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newer
ones
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apply
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had brighter
coulors
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colours
 as well
asbetter
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as better
 forms.
Lookind
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Looking
 at more detail,
the
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apply
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tools
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 A
date
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dates
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 back to 1.4
milion
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million
 years ago which
are
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 0.6
milion
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million
 years older than
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tools
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Tool
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B
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. They have dark
coulor
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colour
 which can be distinguished from
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tools
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tool
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B
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 easily.
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,
tool
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B
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 has a thin
shap
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shape
sharp
 at the top which makes it more practical. Things can be cut faster by
tool
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B
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. In front view,
for example
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,
the
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apply
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tool
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B
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hase
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has
the
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a
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 thick body as like
as
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apply
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tool
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 A,
however
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, the top
sectiom
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section
 of
tool
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B
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 is like a pin which can be more effective when people want to cut items. Other views of
tool
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B
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 have better
shap
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shape
 compared to
tool
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 A as well.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tools, b, tool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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