The bar chart illustrates the amount of hours that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists used per day to do 3 activities

The bar chart illustrates the amount of hours that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists used per day to do 3 activities
The bar graph shows the quantity of
time
that four ethnic
group
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groups
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of
tourists
spent per day
to do
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doing
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three leisure activities.
Overall
, the amount of
hours
that
Chinese
tourists
spent
on
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reading books was significantly higher than other groups, and they less frequently used their
time
to visit places.
While
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American and Turkish
tourists
allocate their leisure
time
more balanced than Brazilian
tourists
that
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who
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used
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their spare
time
mostly at the beach. In terms of reading books, the volume of
hours
that
Chinese
tourists
spent
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per day on
this
particular occation is 8
hours
which is dominantly higher than other groups. The remaining groups used four to five
hours
of their spare
time
on
this
activity. The
quantity
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number
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of
hours
that
Chinese
visitors spent
on
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visiting places was the lowest with one hour per day compared to their counterparts. The amount of
hours
that Brazilian
tourists
spent
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spend
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at the beach during their leisure
time
is 6
hours
and
this
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amounts are 5, 4, and 3
hours
for Turkish, American, and
Chinese
tourists
respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, tourists, hours, chinese with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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