The maps illustrate the Islip town center now and how it would be changed in the future.

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These maps highlight the plan for future upgradation of Islip town

centre

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it is planned to encircle the town

centre

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with a dual carriageway

road

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connected to the existing

road

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on the western and eastern sides. The school will remain in the existing location, south of the carriageway

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the old housing complex. The existing main

road

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will be closed to traffic and converted to pedestrian only. The shops north of

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will be transformed and incorporated into a new shopping

centre

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, a bus station and car park will be made adjoining

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to facilitate increased footfall. At present, Islip town

centre

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has two housing areas, adjacent to each other in the south. It is planned to increase housing quarters to four, with the additional housing located within the dual carriageway

road

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south of the main lane and east of the car park.

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housing will

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be connected to the dual

carriage way

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carriageway

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road

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. The park is planned to be downsized to make way for new developments, the shops south of the main

road

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will

however

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remain in their current location, with no planned changes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

189 words

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