The two maps below show an island before and after the construction some of tourists facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate the changes in an unnamed
island
after it was redeveloped for tourists.
The island
has seen a drastic change with the almost barren landscape now dotted with cottages, restaurants and a new pier.
Firstly
, there has been a significant addition of new accommodation. Previously the island
had no facilities for tourists to stay, but now 15 new cottages have been built. These are all connected by footpaths.
The main reception
is located in the centre of the island
and divides the two main housing areas. There is a vehicle track encircling the reception
and connecting it to the newly constructed pier.
The pier has facilitated access to the seas and sailing boats are now parked near it to help facilitate entry and exit from the island
.
A newly constructed restaurant has been added north of the reception
, next to the coastline. this
eatery is well connected by a motorable road to the reception
.
The beach has been made more accessible by connecting with a footpath to the new accommodations. The old vegetation has been left untouched and all new buildings have come around the existing trees.Submitted by surabhichattree on
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