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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations
There is no denying the fact that sometimes we have to accept unsatisfactory situations.
While
 it is a commonly held belief by some that it is better to accept a difficult situation like inappropriate work, there is
also
 an argument that it is better for people to improve themselves so as to turn these situations into good ones.
This
 essay will analyse
this
 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
one
Correct article usage
the one
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 hand, some people have to be content
in
Change preposition
with
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 bad
In other words
, circumstances
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
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cause
they
Correct pronoun usage
them
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are
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to be
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 controlled by specific conditions. conditions
such
 as a person’s educational level or standard of living
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task response
You should offer a clear introduction, presenting the topic and your stance on it, followed by structured paragraphs for discussing both views and your own opinion.
task response
Make sure to fully address the prompt by discussing both views mentioned, providing specific examples and reasons, and clearly stating your own opinion in a separate paragraph towards the end.
coherence and cohesion
Use transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs and ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea.
task response
Develop your ideas more fully with specific examples and explanations. Each viewpoint should be explored in detail to make your essay more persuasive and informative.
coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a conclusion that summarises the main points discussed and reaffirms your own stance on the issue.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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