the diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electric. summmaries the information be selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electric.                      summmaries the information be selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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the given drawing provides an idea of how electrical capability is generated with the help of
rain
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flow. looking from an
overall
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perspective, the entire method of generating capacity supplies contains seven steps. the given drawing provides an idea of how electrical capability is generated with the help of
rain
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flow. looking from an
overall
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perspective, the entire method of generating capacity supplies contains seven steps. beginning with the rays of the sun and ending with the generation of electrical function supplies for hospitals and schools. in the first step, seawater absorbs hot sun rays,
then
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the
rain
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vapour converts into clouds, and they downpour as
rain
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into the dam. afterwards, the valve
that is
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located at the bottom of the dam is open, which results in a saliva flow pressure causing the turbine to immediately start to rotate producing high voltage electricity potential, and at the same time the residual rainwater returns back to the reservoir through a tube by the force pumped in order to recycle the aqua and
further
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use. the final step, underground cables distribute
this
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energy to different areas,
such
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as hospitals,schools,houses and factories. in short, it is a long and expensive process because lots of resources are required.
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