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In many countries people use electric devices for daily house chores while some think it is an expensive energy source and we ought to use gas instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.?

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Introduction
Nowadays.most
of
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countries are using electric devices for daily
house
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 chores others think
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electric
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electricity
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 is
expensive
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an expensive
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 energy source it will
be change
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 to
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use
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a
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gas
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In my opinion. It is good for
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a
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electric
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for
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daily I will
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discuss
dicuss
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discuss
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Body paragraph 2
Firstly
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electric
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Why
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are
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miscarry
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necessary
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vacuum
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electric one because it doesn'
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a long
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along
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time
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people
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 to clean the
house
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moreover
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west
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time
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peolpe
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people
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the
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house
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 and it isn'
t
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It
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 for any
people
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this
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and it is for
use
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electric
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 daily but with a smart person that will be fine
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On
other
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hand
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electric
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money and it is bad.
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Most
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people
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a
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money I
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prefer
perfer
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prefer
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clothes and food or
gift
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 rather than
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electric
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 daily because the
electric
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 and classic are
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 same but the
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 is westing
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time
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smaes
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makes
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Conclusion
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 .I am using
electric
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 daily because it is easy
for used
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to use
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it
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and it doesn'
t
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west
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waste
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a
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time
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 only 20 minutes every day
clean
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 the
house
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 other it takes one hour it is
struggle
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a struggle
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this
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 is up to the person

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coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of your essay by including clear introductory and concluding paragraphs that state the topic and summarize your opinion and arguments respectively.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas and arguments. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by explanations or examples.
coherence cohesion
Improve your essay's logical structure by clearly distinguishing between the two views and your own opinion. Make sure each viewpoint and your opinion are clearly stated and well-supported.
task achievement
Address the task more completely by discussing both views thoroughly before presenting your own opinion. Make sure each view is explored with sufficient depth and balanced analysis.
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Use more specific examples to support your arguments. Examples help to illustrate your points and make your arguments more convincing.
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Check for grammatical accuracy and punctuation in your writing. Mistakes can distract from the clarity of your ideas and arguments.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • daily house chores
  • expensive energy source
  • electric devices
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • renewable sources
  • carbon footprint
  • fossil fuels
  • cost-effective
  • safety risks
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • environmental sustainability
  • optimal solution
  • advancement
  • renewable energy sources
  • viable
  • eco-friendly
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