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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays the average
change
 per month in the prices of
copper
,
nickel
 and
zinc
 during 2014. The units are measured in the percentage of
change
 in
price
 compared with
previous
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the previous
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 month.
According to
 the figure, by hitting the peak of
6
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a 6
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%
alterance
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increase
 in
price
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 of
Nickel
 in January, it
then
 experienced a
drastically
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 decrease to -3% until
June
, before ascending considerably to -1% in July. Notably, the proportion of
change
 in
price
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 of
Nickel
 remained still to -1% from July to September. After that, it saw a gradual drop in prices of
Nickel
 in October
then
 increased to 1% in November which was just similar
as
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Zinc
, which was stable
to
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 December as well. In terms of
Copper
, it appeared a similar trend as
Nickel
,
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dropping from 2% in January to around -0.5% in May, but followed by a remained trend from May to
June
. And
then
 the average monthly
change
 in
price
 of
Copper
 fluctuated from September to December. When it comes to
Zinc
, before rising from 1% in January to 3% in February, it experienced a gradual decline to -1% in
June
. Notably, the average
change
 in
price
 of
Zinc
 steadily increased from -1% in October to 2% in December. In conclusion, the average monthly
change
 in prices of
copper
,
nickel
 and
zinc
 in 2014 all appeared a similar trend, especially from
June
 to September.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, copper, nickel, zinc, price, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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