Today’s teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, life has become
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extremely hard more than previous one. Teenagers are suffering due the challenges
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as finding a good job, education and relationships. In
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will provide
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several different reasons supported by real examples based on my own experience. Research has found that the longer we live the more we realize that the only thing is truly
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in
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reality is merely pain, suffering and futility. The
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reason for
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is companies and businessmen are seeking
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a significant amount of money in order to present a good quality of education
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as schools and universities.
Furthermore
, food has become more expensive than before,
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after Carona
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disease
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For instance
, In Kuwait, students
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to maintain their essentials like
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between eating outside
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and
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car gas which have
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increased so dramatically since 2022 in Carona.
On the other hand
, For every rule there is an
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exceptions
exception
and solutions might make an enormous
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to prevent issues.
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, the administration should
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prominent
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in promoting
teenagers
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future life, and they must set goals to achieve their needs by
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them with loans with zero
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.
Moreover
, build up more opportunities for creating a new major
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job
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like online
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marketing
and computer
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so they have various
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resources
.
Also
, encourage the majority by sending them to study abroad, so they can
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accumulate
their knowledge for their own countries. In conclusion, young people have been facing
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hard times to survive and they having a hard time more than the
last
generations. The governments and parents must stand next to them and assist them to enhance the quality
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their lives.
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task achievement
Your essay attempts to address the prompt but lacks depth in its argumentation. Try to develop your ideas more fully with specific, detailed examples rather than broad statements. Showing how these issues affect teenagers specifically would make your response more relevant and complete.
coherence cohesion
The essay sometimes struggles with coherence due to abrupt transitions and unclear connections between ideas. To improve, consider using linking words and phrases more effectively to signal the relationship between points. Also, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea that is expanded upon.
coherence cohesion
To strengthen your essay, work on constructing a more logical structure where the introduction clearly presents the topic and your position, each body paragraph expands on a distinct reason or example, and the conclusion summarizes your argument. This will make your writing more cohesive and easier to follow.
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