Some people think that consumerism can boost the economy and create business and jobs. Others consider that society becomes a ‘ throw-away society’ producing unnecessary waste. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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argue that the majority of consumption can contribute to
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economic growth and create more employment opportunities,
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the opponents of
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concept take the view that producing unnecessary waste can result in a throw-away society.
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consumerism can help the growth of
economy
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and
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more job places, I believe that
overconsumption
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has detrimental effects on
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society and the environment.  On the
one
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hand, most
people
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consider that the economy can be enhanced on a significant scale by consuming more products. If
people
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purchase more items and things from any
markets
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, it can result in more revenue. In
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way, businesses can widen their chains to the whole area, maybe to the all country.
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, in my city,
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shop, "Al
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", has drawn
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significant number of consumers.
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significant amount of money, the boss of
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shop has decided to create chains, and in
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way, they offered more employment opportunities for
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.
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, some consider that
overconsumption
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is indeed more harmful
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both the community and the nature. If
overconsumption
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is observed in
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certain area, it means that a glut of products will be thrown to
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because not all of them might be necessary items for
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use.
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, it can lead to a reduction in natural demands. Take Madrid as an example. In
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year, the consumption of some products has increased on a considerable scale, and it has ended with a dearth of main sources, including food, water, and other things. In conclusion,
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production growth can be beneficial for businesses in terms of boosting the economy and generating more employment places, I consider that the potential drawbacks of
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such
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as a reduction in the number of essential living demands cannot be ignored.
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