The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. (pounds sterling)

The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010. (pounds  sterling)
The bar chart highlights data about
money
which was spent on several consumer goods in the
UK
and
France
in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling. Looking from an
overall
perspective, what stands out from the bar chart is that the
British
spent more
money
on consumer goods than
France
in the period given. Both the
British
and the French spent most of their
money
on cars ,
whereas
money
which was spent on perfume
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the least in the
UK
compared to cameras in
France
. In terms of cars, people in the
UK
spent just about £450,000 on
this
as opposed to the French who spent £400,000. The
British
spent more
money
on books than the French around £400,000 and £300,000 respectively. In the
UK
, pay for cameras which was just over £350,000 was double that of
France
, which accounted for only £150,000.
In contrast
,
money
spent on the other goods was higher in
France
. Above £350,000 was spent by the French on computers which was steadily more than the
British
who spent exactly £350,000. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for £200,000 of expenditure in
France
but above £150,000 in the
UK
.
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