The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.          Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts compare the percentages of online
sales
across different retail sectors in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010. For three of the sectors, it is evident that over
this
time
frame
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there was a significant change in their proportion of online transactions.
It is clear that
Electronics
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the Electronics
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and Appliance sector accounted for the majority of online
sales
( 35%) in 2005, but
this
percentage dropped to 30% in 2010. During the same five-year period, as an increasing number of people chose to purchase food and
beverage
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beverages
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online, the transactions went from just 22% to 32%, making it the retail sector with the largest
overall
proportion of the online market. In 2005, the home furnishing industry boasted an impressive 25% of the total online
sales
in Canada.
However
, by 2010, the figure had fallen considerably to 15%. Interestingly, online
sales
of video games eventually overtook
sales
of home furnishings,
although
video games still represented only 23% of the market.
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