the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first bar chart illustrates the proportion of households with electrical appliances and the other chart gives information about
howmany
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how many
hours of housework each week, per household in a country, in
the
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terms of 9
years
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.
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, at the beginning of the period, the percentage of washing
machine
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was higher than others,
while
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after 9
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it levelled off at the lowest position.
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, the number of hours of
house work
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was extremely higher in the first year of the duration. Looking at the details, in 1920, the figure for
washing
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the washing
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machine
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machines
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was 40%, and the ratio for vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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was about 30 and just above 0 per cent,
repectively
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respectively
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year
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people used electrical appliances more than
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years
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. In the future
years
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, the use of
refrigerator
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saw a dramatic rise to reach
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100 in 1980,
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proportion
of making use of vacuum
cleanser
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cleansers
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stood at that amount too, in 2000. But, washing
machine
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machines
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saw a slight upward trend
,
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and became the
least used
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appliance at around 70 in 2019. The total amount of time of
house work
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housework
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witnessed a downward trend and levelled off at approximately 10 in 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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