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Are higher taxes or lower taxes better for society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#taxes #society
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There is no different type of objective fact that
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 about higher taxes or lower taxes
better
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 for society is prevalent in our reality because of its importance. Most
people
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 agree with
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 because of its many benefits. Some of the
people
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 highlight its
disadvantages
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. I would like to discuss the
advantages
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 and the
disadvantages
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 in my next paragraphs the same. Describe different types of
advantages
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 I would like to mention the first and foremost advantage which is the chance that the governments can have
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finances. Another advantage that might come to mind
people
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 might be
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is chance that
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governments
 can do many things. So, there are many different types of
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 that we can describe now but I would like to discuss my next paragraph. On its darker side, there are some
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 that make it problematic and worrying, I would like to highlight two
disadvantages
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. First is that it might become a financial problem for many businesses.
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there are causes of different types of financial problems for many
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. I think there are many shortcomings of
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 kind and we can talk about
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 all the time. Now I want to speak about my conclusion. Concluding the above
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, neither its negative nor the positive sides can be ignored. In my opinion, the positive and the negative sides are mixed processes in our life that follow each other and they should be considered more generalized.
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, I remain of the opinion that it is not necessary to ignore the
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 and
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 and to outline their impact in reality
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Introduction
Try to introduce your essay more clearly. Your introduction should clearly state whether you believe higher or lower taxes are better for society, to adequately set the stage for your argument.
Body Paragraphs
Use clearer and more specific examples to support your points. Rather than broadly stating 'advantages' or 'disadvantages', provide concrete examples or situations where higher or lower taxes have had a significant impact on society.
Conclusion
Ensure your conclusion summarizes your main points and clearly states your stance on the topic. Your conclusion in the current form is a bit unclear and seems to neither support nor refute the statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on developing a logical structure within your essay. Use clear paragraph divisions, and make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and purpose.
Task Achievement
Focus on developing clear, comprehensive ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea that is explored in depth, rather than briefly mentioning several unrelated ideas.
Evidence and Examples
Incorporate relevant, specific examples to strengthen your argument. General statements about advantages and disadvantages need to be supported with specific details to demonstrate how higher or lower taxes affect society.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • income inequality
  • redistributive policies
  • equitable
  • disparities
  • stifle
  • innovation
  • burdensome
  • dynamic
  • competitive
  • efficiency
  • administration
  • tax collection
  • wastage
  • disadvantages
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