The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
The provided table depicts the number of male and female workers and workplaces in England and Wales. The data is provided from
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year
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years
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1851 to 1901.
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, it is clearly seen that
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significant growth is seen in the number of
factories
from
year
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1861.
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,
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declined
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in
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numbers
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of
employees
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from
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the table. looking at the table in detail,
therewere
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there were
about 477,100 total
employees
working in 225 different
factories
in
year
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1851. In the
year
1861, 131,780 male
employees
were performing their work in 227 companies compared to 160,000 females.
However
, 80,123 and 76,132 male
employees
used to work in
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year
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1871 and 1881 respectively.
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60,000 and 50,000 females were working in 622 and 721 companies according in the Same
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.
Analyzingthe
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further
, 65,000 males and 40,000 females
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their
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tasks in 625 different
factories
in
year
ge
factories
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year
1891. It is apparent that 61,000 total
employee
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were used to work in various 600 firms. Out of
them
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31,000 were males.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, factories, employees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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