The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The provided bar chart illustrates the information about the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 different cities in 2000.
Overall
, it could be noticed that Mexico
City
hold the top in both minimum and maximum SO2 and N2O levels,
following
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followed
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by Beijing, Calcutta and
then
Los Angeles during the whole surveyed period.
According to
the chart, Mexico
City
is the most air pollutant
city
,
80
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with 80
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in
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apply
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minimum and 200
in
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apply
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maximum SO2
micrograms
per m3, more than that of three other cities
plus
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apply
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together.
In addition
, Los Angeles
is seemed
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seems
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to be the most environment-friendly
city
, with only
average
Correct article usage
an average
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of about 6
micrograms
per m3.
Besides
, the N2O
pollutants
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pollutant
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level in Mexico
City
still
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is still
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incomprehensibly high, approximately 150
micrograms
While
the least pollutant
city
in
this
case came to Beijing, 14 and 54. Los Angeles was top 2 in N2O, between 39 and 104
micrograms
respectively.
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