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The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The provided bar chart illustrates the information about the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 different cities in 2000.
Overall
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, it could be noticed that Mexico
City
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 hold the top in both minimum and maximum SO2 and N2O levels,
following
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followed
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 by Beijing, Calcutta and
then
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 Los Angeles during the whole surveyed period.
According to
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 the chart, Mexico
City
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 is the most air pollutant
city
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,
80
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with 80
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in
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apply
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minimum and 200
in
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apply
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maximum SO2
micrograms
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 per m3, more than that of three other cities
plus
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apply
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together.
In addition
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, Los Angeles
is seemed
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seems
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 to be the most environment-friendly
city
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, with only
average
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an average
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 of about 6
micrograms
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 per m3.
Besides
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, the N2O
pollutants
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pollutant
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 level in Mexico
City
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still
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 incomprehensibly high, approximately 150
micrograms
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While
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 the least pollutant
city
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 in
this
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 case came to Beijing, 14 and 54. Los Angeles was top 2 in N2O, between 39 and 104
micrograms
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, micrograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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