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The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.

The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.
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The pie graphs illustrate the
sources
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 of the
UK
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tax
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income
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 for
last
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year
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 and the total state spending for
last
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year
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 in the
UK
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.
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, the three main
sources
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 of the
UK
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tax
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 revenue were
income
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tax
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, national insurance and
value added
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value-added
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tax
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,
however
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, the most significant outcomes of the
UK
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 government were pensions, health care, and welfare expenses for the
last
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year
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.
Income
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tax
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 accounted for almost 30% of the total
UK
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tax
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 gain for
last
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year
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, representing the highest
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income
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 for the
UK
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. National insurance and
value added
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value-added
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tax
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 were the remaining major
sources
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 of
UK
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tax
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 revenue with just over a fifth and 17%. The
tax
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income
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 from other
sources
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, corporation
tax
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, council
tax
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, business rates and fuel duty varied between 5% and 11%. The government spent a fifth of the budget on pensions, becoming the biggest expense compared to the other areas. Health care and welfare expenditures accounted
for18
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for 18
% and 17% respectively,
while
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 the state spent 14% of the budget on education for the
last
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year
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. The remaining areas
such
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 as defence, protection, general government, other
spendings
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spending
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, and interest payments on debt recorded between 7% and 3% of the total expenses.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, uk, tax, income, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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