The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture below illustrates how
bricks
for the buildings are made.
Overall
, with information that diagrams shows , is that processing has seven steps begging with claying with digger and ending with delivering. Firstable, digger is clay all necessary things for
bricks
and bring it to roller. On the roller mental grid is falling down and got mixed with sand and water. After that, it has a two choice: go to wire cutter or to bould, but in both situations they become to
bricks
. The second part of
this
process comprises of four others steps. So it received to drying oven, where
bricks
are become clean , time of all drying operation tooks 24-48 hours. To continue
this
,
bricks
go to special place where they sorted for three different cells: kiln, the heating of it tooks 200C-980C, next is 870C-1300C, and the
last
one is cooling chamber with 48-72 hours. The
last
thing is packing and delivering to anywhere. Interesting thing to notice, is that most time of process tooks cooling chamber and drying.
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